Into the Fire

Passionate thoughts about the world of writing and the Power of God

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Prelude

She could make smoking a cigarette look elegant, seductive . . . and dangerous even. Chic. Cool. And somehow romantic. Of course she could make anything look good. She appeared taller than she was, standing flat-footed at maybe 5’ 7”. It was probably the shoes. Often those very high skinny heels somehow lifting that lithe, narrow frame. I saw her in the summertime out there against the building with her cigarette, her skin nearly bronze and not one bit unnaturally enhanced. Standing there in the rain of late winter under the generous overhang, well, leaning really, against the coarse white brick of the building, it was almost the color of ivory. So fair. I wondered how she didn’t burn in the summer sun. On the one occasion when I saw her smile in the last year, her teeth were a dazzling white—right out of a toothpaste commercial or a mailer ad from a dentist for the new Zoom 2 whitening method. No smoker’s stain on those pearly whites.

Anyway . . .

That’s basically how the whole thing began. By casually, unintentionally, watching her smoke . . .

 

Father, thank you for characters, words, stories, true inspiration. Apart from you, I can do nothing. In the Name of Jesus, Amen.

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6 responses to “A beginning . . .”

  1. Brenda S. Anderson Avatar

    Love it! You do first person very well, and that’s not common.

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  2. Nicole Petrino-Salter Avatar

    Thank you so much, Bren. What a super compliment. I appreciate you so much.

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  3. Debra Avatar
    Debra

    Here are 5 things I loved about this novel and why I highly recommend it:
    1) The characters and the settings were described perfectly.
    2) There was a feeling of suspense in the interactions of the characters.
    3) There were lines that made me laugh.
    4) You wrote “he cussed” rather than making us read profanity. This is fiction, not a transcript of a factual conversation.
    5) I could not tell how it was going to end.

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  4. Nicole Petrino-Salter Avatar

    Debra, I consider you (and both Brendas) an astute reader(s) for three reasons: 1)you know what you like and what you don’t, 2)you appreciate what you consider both good writing and good stories, and 3)you don’t compromise on your tastes – and by that I mean you generally don’t make excuses for not liking certain kinds of writing for whatever reason(s).
    You’ve given me such good commentary on my work and you’ve invested hours into it. That can’t be appreciated enough. To say thank you sells short my feelings and gratitude, but it’s all I’ve got. Thank you so much.

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  5. Debra Avatar
    Debra

    Oh, the hours I spent reading your stories were so enjoyable!

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  6. Nicole Petrino-Salter Avatar

    Thank you, my sweet friend.

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